Of course this happens in Barcelona. Of COURSE. At 3:00 AM, no less. I loved your opening line! It's so hard to write those well, I know, but yours there drew me right in.
Mycroft was no help whatsoever. He had the power of attorney, but John felt like it would be easier to reach God by phone than Mycroft.
Let me just squee at that awesome line for a second here, which made me grin like a loon even though the story was already starting to get intense.
John was forced to scour through Sherlock's address book and find the private, emergency line to Mycroft. Scour was a bit of a strong word, as there were only two names in it and one of them was John's.
Hee! Oh, these inside references to the show are great.
He wondered if he was scared, not being able to communicate freely.
Ouch! Right in the heart!
They were keeping him very well sedated, because apparently Sherlock was 'agitated' when he was awake. John interpreted this to mean 'acting like Sherlock'.
You know, I was really not expecting to smile so much while reading this story. It has a tenderness and a familiarity about it that is so very endearing.
“I can't bring you a murder, Sherlock. I don't think the nurses would approve.”
All these one-liners! Eee!
“You silly boy,” she said. “I'm always going to worry about you.”
Sherlock didn't know what to do with that. She smiled and patted his hand.
Awww! That is so cute!
I loved the whole scene with Sherlock trying to describe to the doctor what he and John do. "MURDER." Haha! This is beautifully written. You've done a great job keeping Sherlock in character while also making his injury clear. His method of speaking, additionally, is excellently conveyed. I wasn't frustrated or thrown off even once by how you wrote his dialogue, which I suppose was helped a lot by the story's being in John's perspective. It helps when someone knows how to interpret! And John, of course, knows Sherlock better than anyone.
So, so glad Sherlock is still Sherlock, and I know he is, too. Fingers crossed for a good recovery! I will have to look through the other chapter later. This is wonderful so far!
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Date: 2013-01-23 10:58 am (UTC)Mycroft was no help whatsoever. He had the power of attorney, but John felt like it would be easier to reach God by phone than Mycroft.
Let me just squee at that awesome line for a second here, which made me grin like a loon even though the story was already starting to get intense.
John was forced to scour through Sherlock's address book and find the private, emergency line to Mycroft. Scour was a bit of a strong word, as there were only two names in it and one of them was John's.
Hee! Oh, these inside references to the show are great.
He wondered if he was scared, not being able to communicate freely.
Ouch! Right in the heart!
They were keeping him very well sedated, because apparently Sherlock was 'agitated' when he was awake. John interpreted this to mean 'acting like Sherlock'.
You know, I was really not expecting to smile so much while reading this story. It has a tenderness and a familiarity about it that is so very endearing.
“I can't bring you a murder, Sherlock. I don't think the nurses would approve.”
All these one-liners! Eee!
“You silly boy,” she said. “I'm always going to worry about you.”
Sherlock didn't know what to do with that. She smiled and patted his hand.
Awww! That is so cute!
I loved the whole scene with Sherlock trying to describe to the doctor what he and John do. "MURDER." Haha! This is beautifully written. You've done a great job keeping Sherlock in character while also making his injury clear. His method of speaking, additionally, is excellently conveyed. I wasn't frustrated or thrown off even once by how you wrote his dialogue, which I suppose was helped a lot by the story's being in John's perspective. It helps when someone knows how to interpret! And John, of course, knows Sherlock better than anyone.
So, so glad Sherlock is still Sherlock, and I know he is, too. Fingers crossed for a good recovery! I will have to look through the other chapter later. This is wonderful so far!