ext_24142 ([identity profile] donutsweeper.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] awanderingbard 2013-05-07 09:02 pm (UTC)

Awwww, I like this your voices and daemon choices are so wonderful.

You do have some typos I noticed though. I hope you don't mind my pointing out but 'Yeah, I get it, shh', my looked said. (look?) and there are some tense shifts like, He's a champion crawler (He was)

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