I feel like I'm going to be a bit rambly with my comments on these chapters, so my apologies in advance for that. I think I'm rusty with leaving long comments, and so the skill of coherency while doing so is kinda coming and going as it pleases. But I loved this! It's a really good story, and I feel like I'm learning something from it, too, which is fantastic. I can really see that you put effort into researching for this.
Anyway, I'm gonna start rambling now. Again, I love the way you're writing out Sherlock's speech. His inaccuracies and occasional use of similar words (like "test" instead of "text") is smooth and well-incorporated. I like the details of him looking out the window in thought, John's increase in nightmares, and Lestrade's careful patience with Sherlock as he struggles to get through his words. And the bit where Lestrade defended Sherlock by saying he didn't think he was on drugs! And John's bit of doubt when Sherlock denied it! And the "list of people who don't want Sherlock dead" bit! Great stuff!
Oh! Oh! And the entire scene at the end with Sherlock picking up on the fact that John had doubted him, and then his attempts to show that the needle marks on his arms were old... Urg, that just tugged on my heartstrings. It's sweet and so painful. I'm glad he was at least able to admit to John that he liked having his company around.
I'm so glad there's more of this to read. *is giddy*
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Date: 2013-01-24 10:42 am (UTC)Anyway, I'm gonna start rambling now. Again, I love the way you're writing out Sherlock's speech. His inaccuracies and occasional use of similar words (like "test" instead of "text") is smooth and well-incorporated. I like the details of him looking out the window in thought, John's increase in nightmares, and Lestrade's careful patience with Sherlock as he struggles to get through his words. And the bit where Lestrade defended Sherlock by saying he didn't think he was on drugs! And John's bit of doubt when Sherlock denied it! And the "list of people who don't want Sherlock dead" bit! Great stuff!
Oh! Oh! And the entire scene at the end with Sherlock picking up on the fact that John had doubted him, and then his attempts to show that the needle marks on his arms were old... Urg, that just tugged on my heartstrings. It's sweet and so painful. I'm glad he was at least able to admit to John that he liked having his company around.
I'm so glad there's more of this to read. *is giddy*