Please, always point out typos! Thank you! The tense shifts are something I have trouble with in First Person, because depending on how far in the future the story is being told, Mal might still be crawling, if you know what I mean. Or things that are eternal, like Murphy can always look at you so hard your daemon feels it. That's not something that changes. It think it's my French grammar messing me up. Thanks for picking it up on my mistakes, though! I appreciate it.
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Date: 2013-05-07 09:17 pm (UTC)I'm glad you enjoyed story! Thanks for commenting.